IELTS Writing Task 1 | The numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum (1 Table and 2 Pie Charts)

Task 1 | Essay 13
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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
  • Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task 1 - Diagram Essay

How to answer this essay?
  • Introducion
  • Paraphrase the statement on the question paper to describe what the table and charts show.
  • Overview
  • Identify key features i.e. major changes.
  • Description of table
  • Detailed information about the table – dates/figures/changes
  • Description of pie charts
  • Detailed information about the pie charts – dates/figures/changes
Model Answer | Marked as Band 8
Cohesive connecting words that improve coherence in writing . Useful less common words that boost fluency in writing .
  • The table1  gives information about the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum2  while the pie charts illustrate the level of visitor satisfaction. The statistics are taken from the years before and after the refurbishment of the museum.
  • It is3  noticeable that in the4  year following the improvements more people went to the museum and they generally felt more satisfied after their visit.
  • Looking at the figures in the table, visitor numbers5  went up from 74,000 to 92,000 after the renovations. This is a6  significant increase of 18,000, or7  just under 25%.
  • 8  Turning to the pie charts, it is interesting to see that visitors who felt very satisfied or satisfied rose considerably from 45% before it was refurbished to 75% after.9  Conversely, the proportion of those who were dissatisfied or very dissatisfied more than halved, from 50% before the changes to 20% after. Finally, the10  proportion of visitors who did not11  respond to the survey12  remained unchanged at just 5% in both years.
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