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- The table1 gives information about the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum2 while the pie charts illustrate the level of visitor satisfaction. The statistics are taken from the years before and after the refurbishment of the museum.
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It is3 noticeable that in the4 year following the improvements more people went to the museum and they generally felt more satisfied after their visit.
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Looking at the figures in the table, visitor numbers5 went up from 74,000 to 92,000 after the renovations. This is a6 significant increase of 18,000, or7 just under 25%.
- 8 Turning to the pie charts, it is interesting to see that visitors who felt very satisfied or satisfied rose considerably from 45% before it was refurbished to 75% after.9 Conversely, the proportion of those who were dissatisfied or very dissatisfied more than halved, from 50% before the changes to 20% after. Finally, the10 proportion of visitors who did not11 respond to the survey12 remained unchanged at just 5% in both years.