IELTS Writing Task 2 | Can more actions be taken to prevent crime?

• Introduction:
• Paraphrase the overall essay main topic.
• Write a clear opinion.
• 1st Body Paragraph
• Write a topic sentence with a clear main idea.
• Explain your main idea.
• Develop it with specific or hypothetical examples.
• 2nd Body Paragraph
• Write a new topic sentence with a new main idea.
• Explain your new main idea.
• Include specific details and examples.
• Add as much information as you can and make sure it links logically.
• Conclusion:
• Summarise your main ideas.
• Include a final thought.

• Many concerned parties today feel that crime has already been reduced as much as is realistically possible. While I agree this may be true in nations where security is prioritized over privacy rights, there is still tremendous progress that can be made globally.
• Those who argue crime no longer needs addressing point to technological innovations. This situation is most apparent in authoritarian nations. Security surveillance can include the use of street cameras, digital tracking, and eavesdropping on private communications. For instance, in South Korea the crime rate in most urban areas is negligible and the average person reports little anxiety about possible criminality, in contrast to periods in the past when there were more instances of robbery, assault, theft, pickpocketing, and so on. These technological shifts have greatly aided law enforcement in prosecuting criminals thereby also increasing the deterrence of potential offences.
• However, crime still exists and can be countered by addressing the deeper, societal roots. The main cause of all crime is poverty. When individuals earn a wage sufficient to maintain a decent standard of living, the entire motive for most crimes disappears. The evidence for this is that in wealthy countries where there is a relatively even distribution of wealth, the crime rates are low and the police do not require draconian punishment or surveillance techniques. Beyond income, it is also possible to invest in improving mental health. Many people today spend too much time online and are vulnerable to extremist views. A still significant proportion of crimes could be eliminated by encouraging people to spend more time outdoors in their community.
• In conclusion, despite technology has reduced certain kinds of criminality greatly, it is still possible to lower crime rates by embracing a holistic, societal approach. The complete eradication of crime is likely impossible and therefore there will always be a need to make progress.

Vocabulary and Useful Expressions

• Many concerned parties today feel that: lots of people think
• reduced as much as is realistically possible: get it down as low as it can go
• this may be true in nations where security is prioritized over privacy rights: is the case in countries that care more about being safe than about freedom
• still tremendous progress that can be made globally: lots that can still be done around the world
• crime no longer needs addressing point to technological innovations: offenses don’t need to be tackled any more because of new inventions
• apparent in authoritarian nations: clear in non-Democratic countries
• Security surveillance: watching people
• street cameras: CCTV on roads
• digital tracking: following people on online
• eavesdropping on private communications: listening in on people
• crime rate in most urban areas: offenses in cities
• negligible: not that impactful, minor
• reports little anxiety about possible criminality: not worried about crime
• in contrast to periods in the past when: in comparison to earlier times
• robbery: stealing
• assault: hurting
• theft: stealing
• pickpocketing: taking from people
• and so on: etc.
• technological shifts: new inventions, innovations
• greatly aided law enforcement in prosecuting criminals: really helps police catch offenders
• deterrence: discouragement
• potential offences: possible crimes
• exists: are real
• countered by addressing the deeper: fixed by dealing with the source/original
• societal roots: deeper causes
• cause: reason for
• poverty: not rich
• earn a wage sufficient to maintain a decent standard of living: make enough money to live well
• entire motive for most crimes disappears: reason for the majority of offenses goes away
• The evidence for this is that in wealthy countries: the support is that in rich nations
• relatively even distribution of wealth: comparatively equal earnings
• low: not high
• require draconian punishment or surveillance techniques: need old fashioned
• Beyond income: more than just what you earn
• invest in improving mental health: put money into making sure people are healthy
• vulnerable: weak
• extremist views: controversial opinions
• still significant proportion: still a lot of
• eliminated: gotten rid of
• encouraging: motivating
• outdoors in their community: outside in their neighborhood
• greatly: tremendously
• embracing: starting to do
• holistic: overall, combining everything
• societal approach: way of addressing all people
• The complete eradication of crime: getting rid of crime 100%
• impossible: can’t happen
• a need to make progress: have to continue advancing